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| ;Lead | |||
| *Link revolutionary | |||
| *industry and businesses → One is singular, the other plural. Both should be either singular or plural. | |||
| *reforms implemented → reforms were implemented | |||
| *The lead is informative, but it's very long. I feel like the second and third paragraphs need trimming a bit. | |||
| ;Early life - Youth: 1926–47 | |||
| *successful growing → successful at growing | |||
| *and later second wife → and later on, second wife | |||
| ;Early life - Rebellion and Marxism: 1947–50 | |||
| *mostly exiled Dominicans and Cubans → mostly Cubans and exiled Dominicans | |||
| *In April 1948, Castro traveled to Bogotá, Colombia, with a Cuban student group sponsored by President Juan Perón's Argentine government. There, the assassination of popular leftist leader Jorge Eliécer Gaitán Ayala led to widespread rioting and clashes between the governing Conservatives – backed by the army – and leftist Liberals. → need citations at the end of them. | |||
| *Each sentence needs a citation at the end of it. | |||
| ;Cuban Revolution - The Movement and the Moncada Barracks attack: 1952–53 | |||
| *Responding to the attack, Batista's government proclaimed martial law, ordering a violent crackdown on dissent, and imposing strict media censorship. → needs a citation | |||
| *Propaganda broadcast misinformation about the event, claiming that the rebels → this doesn't make sense | |||
| ;Cuban revolution - Imprisonment and the 26th of July Movement: 1953–55 | |||
| *Meanwhile, Castro's wife Mirta gained employment in the Ministry of the Interior, something he discovered through a radio announcement. → needs a citation | |||
| *Please place citations at the end of every sentence throughout the article | |||
| *25 November 1956 → So far, you've used both British and American stylisation of dates. I'm guessing the correct one for a Cuban article would be the American. So this example is correct if so, but previously you have used month, day year. | |||
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 11:02, 18 March 2015 (UTC)
- General
- Lead
- Link revolutionary
- industry and businesses → One is singular, the other plural. Both should be either singular or plural.
- reforms implemented → reforms were implemented
- The lead is informative, but it's very long. I feel like the second and third paragraphs need trimming a bit.
- Early life - Youth
- 1926–47
- successful growing → successful at growing
- and later second wife → and later on, second wife
- Early life - Rebellion and Marxism
- 1947–50
- mostly exiled Dominicans and Cubans → mostly Cubans and exiled Dominicans
- In April 1948, Castro traveled to Bogotá, Colombia, with a Cuban student group sponsored by President Juan Perón's Argentine government. There, the assassination of popular leftist leader Jorge Eliécer Gaitán Ayala led to widespread rioting and clashes between the governing Conservatives – backed by the army – and leftist Liberals. → need citations at the end of them.
- Each sentence needs a citation at the end of it.
- Cuban Revolution - The Movement and the Moncada Barracks attack
- 1952–53
- Responding to the attack, Batista's government proclaimed martial law, ordering a violent crackdown on dissent, and imposing strict media censorship. → needs a citation
- Propaganda broadcast misinformation about the event, claiming that the rebels → this doesn't make sense
- Cuban revolution - Imprisonment and the 26th of July Movement
- 1953–55
- Meanwhile, Castro's wife Mirta gained employment in the Ministry of the Interior, something he discovered through a radio announcement. → needs a citation
- Please place citations at the end of every sentence throughout the article
- 25 November 1956 → So far, you've used both British and American stylisation of dates. I'm guessing the correct one for a Cuban article would be the American. So this example is correct if so, but previously you have used month, day year.
... more to follow