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== The Ticket that Exploded and The Nova Express == | |||
This article makes a false claim, NOWHERE in either of these novels is there any reference to Scientology. Having read both novels three or four time, at the top of my head I can think of shamanism, the occult, ritual magicks, and voodoo being depicted, but nowhere in any novel is there any direct reference to Scientology. <span style="font-size: smaller;" class="autosigned">—Preceding ] comment added by ] (]) 06:05, 29 September 2009 (UTC)</span><!-- Template:UnsignedIP --> <!--Autosigned by SineBot--> | |||
:Going "off the top of my head" would be a violation of the ] policy. At Misplaced Pages we go by standards of ] and ]. ''']''' (]) 06:08, 29 September 2009 (UTC) | |||
::Then how about this, the reference is someone elses interpretation of Burroughs text, it's not a direct quote from Burroughs himself. The problem being Burroughs writing style is so chaotic that no two people will interpret his text the same way. You can say Apomorphine, and sound had an influence on the novels, not only are they mentioned in nearly every chapter, but Burroughs himself talks about how influential they were in a interview conducted by Gerard Mangala that's usually included with the collected Cut-up Trilogy. <span style="font-size: smaller;" class="autosigned">—Preceding ] comment added by ] (]) 06:31, 29 September 2009 (UTC)</span><!-- Template:UnsignedIP --> <!--Autosigned by SineBot--> | |||
:::Exactly, the reference is a secondary source, not a primary source. ''']''' (]) 14:29, 29 September 2009 (UTC) | |||
::::Then why does the article still say "For example, in both The Ticket That Exploded (1962) and Nova Express (1964), Scientology, along with the cut-up technique, silence, and apomorphine, allows the characters to resist social control." In that context it appears the article is saying that Scientology had a direct effect on Burroughs writing, and that's just not the case. Even when he was affiliated with Scientology he was never a strict practitioner. <span style="font-size: smaller;" class="autosigned">—Preceding ] comment added by ] (]) 20:16, 29 September 2009 (UTC)</span><!-- Template:UnsignedIP --> <!--Autosigned by SineBot--> | |||
:::::Do you have ] ] ] to support your above claims? ''']''' (]) 20:24, 29 September 2009 (UTC) | |||
== FA candidate? == | |||
== Not approp for Novels WikiProject == | |||
I believe that this article completely fulfils all featured article criteria, and should be taken to FA review. I however have not contributed to it enough substantially to do so myself. ] (]) 21:59, 19 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
- Not approp for Novels WikiProject - ] do not refer to the works as a "novel", and the bulk of the writing is nonfiction. ''']''' (]) 10:54, 14 April 2009 (UTC) | |||
:Thanks for your encouragement. You are right that the article fulfills the FA criteria, but I am of the opinion that the article should be more complete to be an FA - there is very little on the themes and reception of the book, as you can see. Unfortunately, there are no more sources - we exhausted them all. I tend not to take articles to FA that I feel are incomplete, even if I have exhausted the sources. ] (]) 22:49, 20 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
::I agree with this assessment by {{user|Awadewit}}, at least for the time being, until our research comes across other appropriate ] sources. It is unfortunate, but that is the way it is with this article, for now. :( -- ''']''' (]) 15:20, 21 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
I have some additional comments by Burroughs in interview book ''The Job'', in which he defends Hubbard and dianetics as a science, interestingly that can be used for both positive and negative human conditioning. This is additional content I can incorporate myself. ] (]) 15:33, 21 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
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:], this article has been through extensive and multiple reviews - perhaps we could first discuss and evaluate this new material, here on the article's talk page? Thank you for your interest, -- ''']''' (]) 15:35, 21 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
⚫ | ::Cirt's suggestion sounds like a good idea. ] (]) 17:13, 21 January 2011 (UTC) | ||
:::It seems {{user|Awadewit}} is in agreement here. We could even work on a proposed draft version from {{user|Sir Richardson}}, for example at ], to analyze the suggested material. Cheers, -- ''']''' (]) 01:47, 22 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
I don't exactly know how much additional material I could write, but it believe it could substantiate at least around a few sentences. I appreciate the interest thus far. ] (]) 07:49, 22 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
==GA review== | |||
:I am sure that like myself, {{user|Awadewit}} is also eager to see what you will come up with at ]. :) -- ''']''' (]) 09:15, 22 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
Yes, probably the best place for it. ] (]) 09:33, 22 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
== Questions == | |||
:Okay, great, thank you. :) -- ''']''' (]) 14:04, 22 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
A rough outline has been established in the sandbox, with more to come. Feel free to edit yourselves. :) ] (]) 16:56, 23 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
*Burroughs is described by a quote: "In April 1970, Burroughs "started a controversy going by publishing an attack on the psychiatry profession and related fields such as Scientology"." Since psychiatry is not a field related to Scientology, what on earth is meant by this? Is the quote describing the mixed up thinking of Burroughs (as is implied) or by someone else who doesn't know what they are talking about? Is Burroughs really confused about the difference between psychiatry (which has been attacked by Scientology) and Scientology? This is a very murky quotation and needs further explanation. It is not even a well worded quotation ("started a controversy going ..."). | |||
*"Suppose Newton had founded a Church of Newtonian physics and refused to show his formula to anyone who doubted the tenets of Newtonian physics? ... It's like a physicist saying 'you can't see my formulae unless you first agree that they are correct sight unseen.'" If this quote is by someone else, it is quite inaccurate. If it is by Burroughs, it is not a good example of clear, insightful thinking, as many religious and fraternal organizations keep aspects secret. Is this just Burroughs trashing Scientology? | |||
*First (topic) sentence from article: "Ali's Smile: Naked Scientology is a collection of essays and a short story by Beat writer William S. Burroughs (1914–97)." It is unclear to me, even after reading the article, whether the book contained content other than the anti-Scientology diatribes described. It sounds like there was a publication of the book that did contain only the anti-Scientology stuff, but the first publication contained other material? It is confusing in the article, as the article body does not detail other content. | |||
*The article contains way too many quotations, the meaning of which is unclear or misleading. It would be an improvement of an editors clarified the quote by putting them in their own words. Without knowing the context of the quotes, this article is difficult to penetrate. Would it not be better to quote Burroughs, rather than quote the agenda of other writers regarding Burroughs? Also, is there no range of opinions on Burroughts. Should not the article describe a variety of opinions, or did the opinions originate only from a narrow group of critics? | |||
*Since Burroughs is a writer, why is there no discussion of his literary style? | |||
*Google brings up this article title '''Ali's Smile: Naked Scientology''' only for this Misplaced Pages article. Amazon and others call it '''Ali's Smile / Naked Scientology'''. Regards, —] (]) 14:08, 5 May 2009 (UTC) | |||
:All references to Scientology in ''The Job'' are now detailed. As of so far: | |||
#I made this a bit clearer . | |||
#This is Cooper quoting Burroughs. | |||
#The majority of the book actually does consist of non-fiction essays, most of which is critical of Scientology. | |||
#It's usually best to quote a bit from secondary sources, rather than primary sources where possible, to avoid ]. | |||
#Secondary sources generally don't get into too much analysis of Burroughs' literary style with regard to this particular work, I suppose we could provide some general background, but that would be more appropriate in the article ]. | |||
#There are multiple different book titles used in secondary sources, I believe this is the one from the most recent publication.''']''' (]) 14:31, 5 May 2009 (UTC) | |||
:*Why to you have Cooper quoting Burroughs, rather than quote Burroughs directly. This is taking quotes out of context and introducing the view point of another, introducing bias. Your logic about quoting an author's words via secondary sources is less OR than quoting (presumably) the same words from the author directly does not avoid OR. This reminds me of a recent discussion in which the secondary source incorrectly quoted the primary source, so the secondary source was accepted as a more accurate version of the author's words than the primary source, the author's words themselves. | |||
:*I guess I will Google the book to figure out what is actually in it, as this article is not clear. Per the topic sentence, as noted above, it is implied the book is wide ranging in content. | |||
:*I don't want to hurt your feelings, but this is not a very clear or understandable article, and I am surprised and disappointed that it is considered to fulfill the GA criteria. —] (]) 14:45, 5 May 2009 (UTC) | |||
#The alternative would be to have the entire article simply be individual Wikipedians' views and interpretations of the book itself, with selected quotes from the book, which would indeed be a violation of ]. Best to rely instead on secondary sources. | |||
#As the topic sentence says, as noted above, the book is a collection of non-fiction essays, along with a fictional short story. | |||
#Please, if you could come up with specific ways to change something or even better, additional useful secondary sources that we have not come across, that would be much more helpful than generalized complaints. ''']''' (]) 14:51, 5 May 2009 (UTC) | |||
:*Well, I am just now reading the book on the web, and I am finding that the first chapter, "Burroughs on Scientology" is not even mainly about Scientology. In fact, is is almost entirely an anti-psychiatry diatribe. Somehow, this article doesn't notice this. Did the article's editors read Burrough's book, or just select reviews of it that concentrated on Scientology? Did anyone actually look at the content of the book the article describes? Perhaps they were fooled by the title and thought the book was mostly about Scientology, when it appears that Scientology is only the shell used by the author to write about a variety of topics he is against. It is ironic that psychiatry, that has been attacked vigorously by Scientology, is actually the main target of Burroughs. This is not mentioned in the article. —] (]) 15:05, 5 May 2009 (UTC). | |||
::I believe you are referring to a portion of the first essay where Burroughs is quoting from a Scientology publication that is critical of psychiatry. ''']''' (]) 15:14, 5 May 2009 (UTC) | |||
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== Article is extremely misleading == | |||
*Burroughs described Scientology's concept of erasing the ] through techniques such as the E-meter, to achieve "a complete freedom from past conditioning and immunity against such conditioning in the future." p. 46 | |||
*Then criticizes L. Ron Hubbard for "overtly fascist utterances." p. 47 Scientology for "protecting the home, the church, the family, decent morals...(no wife swapping)...national boundaries, the concept of RIGHT AND WRONG." "Which side are you on Hubbard which side are you on?" p. 48 | |||
*Claims oppression of Scientology for undoing human conditioning, in the same fashion as psychiatrist ] by the FDA. "The medical profession is suppressing Reich's ] accumulator and his discoveries relative to the use and dangers of orgonic energy. They are suppressing Dianetics and Scientology discovered by Mr L. Ron Hubbard." p. 60 | |||
*"There is every indication that the discoveries of Scientology are being used by the CIA and other official agencies." p. 65 Compares to state and military experimentation with LSD, though does not mention the CIA's ] directly. p. 66 | |||
*An additional reference to Burroughs' belief in ] to effectively treat heroin addiction. Claims it is suppressed by the government and medical industry for the same reasons as Scientology and Reich's orgone theories. p. 122 | |||
*Burroughs says that Hubbard claims "that certain words and and word combinations an produce serious illnesses and mental disturbances. I can claim some skill in the scriveners trade, but I cannot guarantee to write a passage that will make someone physically ill. If Mr. Hubbard's claim is justified, this is certainly a matter for further research, and we can easily find out experimentally whether his cliam is justified or not." Hubbard's "] theory is very easily subject to to experimental verification. Take ten volunteer subjects, subject them to a pain stimulus accompanied by certain words and sounds and images. You can act out little skits." pp. 190–191}} | |||
Now must be established is how they should be incorporated into the article. ] (]) 22:08, 23 January 2011 (UTC) | |||
I urge anyone reading this article to actually read the book. This article in no way conveys the nature of the content nor the style of writing of the book. The article is apparently a selection of statements of others about the book that present a very misleading picture. —] (]) 15:26, 5 May 2009 (UTC) | |||
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:Not sure this is useful. It appears to be primary source description, devoid of secondary source commentary or any indication at all as to why this particular material is specifically noteworthy of inclusion here. -- ''']''' (]) 02:18, 24 January 2011 (UTC) | ||
::Agree with Cirt. Since Burroughs is the author of the interviews, we cannot take this material and integrate it into the article. Only non-controversial, descriptive statements can be sourced to primary sources (see ]) and in the case of Scientology on Misplaced Pages, everything is controversial, so we really need to have secondary sources. Thanks for your interest, though, Sir Richardson. Let us know if we can explain these issues further. ] (]) 04:11, 27 January 2011 (UTC) |
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The Ticket that Exploded and The Nova Express
This article makes a false claim, NOWHERE in either of these novels is there any reference to Scientology. Having read both novels three or four time, at the top of my head I can think of shamanism, the occult, ritual magicks, and voodoo being depicted, but nowhere in any novel is there any direct reference to Scientology. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 66.63.203.132 (talk) 06:05, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
- Going "off the top of my head" would be a violation of the WP:NOR policy. At Misplaced Pages we go by standards of WP:RS and WP:V. Cirt (talk) 06:08, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
- Then how about this, the reference is someone elses interpretation of Burroughs text, it's not a direct quote from Burroughs himself. The problem being Burroughs writing style is so chaotic that no two people will interpret his text the same way. You can say Apomorphine, and sound had an influence on the novels, not only are they mentioned in nearly every chapter, but Burroughs himself talks about how influential they were in a interview conducted by Gerard Mangala that's usually included with the collected Cut-up Trilogy. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 66.63.203.132 (talk) 06:31, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
- Exactly, the reference is a secondary source, not a primary source. Cirt (talk) 14:29, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
- Then why does the article still say "For example, in both The Ticket That Exploded (1962) and Nova Express (1964), Scientology, along with the cut-up technique, silence, and apomorphine, allows the characters to resist social control." In that context it appears the article is saying that Scientology had a direct effect on Burroughs writing, and that's just not the case. Even when he was affiliated with Scientology he was never a strict practitioner. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 66.63.201.60 (talk) 20:16, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
- Do you have independent reliable secondary sources to support your above claims? Cirt (talk) 20:24, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
- Then why does the article still say "For example, in both The Ticket That Exploded (1962) and Nova Express (1964), Scientology, along with the cut-up technique, silence, and apomorphine, allows the characters to resist social control." In that context it appears the article is saying that Scientology had a direct effect on Burroughs writing, and that's just not the case. Even when he was affiliated with Scientology he was never a strict practitioner. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 66.63.201.60 (talk) 20:16, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
- Exactly, the reference is a secondary source, not a primary source. Cirt (talk) 14:29, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
- Then how about this, the reference is someone elses interpretation of Burroughs text, it's not a direct quote from Burroughs himself. The problem being Burroughs writing style is so chaotic that no two people will interpret his text the same way. You can say Apomorphine, and sound had an influence on the novels, not only are they mentioned in nearly every chapter, but Burroughs himself talks about how influential they were in a interview conducted by Gerard Mangala that's usually included with the collected Cut-up Trilogy. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 66.63.203.132 (talk) 06:31, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
FA candidate?
I believe that this article completely fulfils all featured article criteria, and should be taken to FA review. I however have not contributed to it enough substantially to do so myself. Sir Richardson (talk) 21:59, 19 January 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for your encouragement. You are right that the article fulfills the FA criteria, but I am of the opinion that the article should be more complete to be an FA - there is very little on the themes and reception of the book, as you can see. Unfortunately, there are no more sources - we exhausted them all. I tend not to take articles to FA that I feel are incomplete, even if I have exhausted the sources. Awadewit (talk) 22:49, 20 January 2011 (UTC)
I have some additional comments by Burroughs in interview book The Job, in which he defends Hubbard and dianetics as a science, interestingly that can be used for both positive and negative human conditioning. This is additional content I can incorporate myself. Sir Richardson (talk) 15:33, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
- Sir Richardson, this article has been through extensive and multiple reviews - perhaps we could first discuss and evaluate this new material, here on the article's talk page? Thank you for your interest, -- Cirt (talk) 15:35, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
- Cirt's suggestion sounds like a good idea. Awadewit (talk) 17:13, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
- It seems Awadewit (talk · contribs) is in agreement here. We could even work on a proposed draft version from Sir Richardson (talk · contribs), for example at User:Sir Richardson/Sandbox, to analyze the suggested material. Cheers, -- Cirt (talk) 01:47, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
- Cirt's suggestion sounds like a good idea. Awadewit (talk) 17:13, 21 January 2011 (UTC)
I don't exactly know how much additional material I could write, but it believe it could substantiate at least around a few sentences. I appreciate the interest thus far. Sir Richardson (talk) 07:49, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
- I am sure that like myself, Awadewit (talk · contribs) is also eager to see what you will come up with at User:Sir Richardson/Sandbox. :) -- Cirt (talk) 09:15, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
Yes, probably the best place for it. Sir Richardson (talk) 09:33, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
- Okay, great, thank you. :) -- Cirt (talk) 14:04, 22 January 2011 (UTC)
A rough outline has been established in the sandbox, with more to come. Feel free to edit yourselves. :) Sir Richardson (talk) 16:56, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
- All references to Scientology in The Job are now detailed. As of so far:
- Burroughs described Scientology's concept of erasing the reactive mind through techniques such as the E-meter, to achieve "a complete freedom from past conditioning and immunity against such conditioning in the future." p. 46
- Then criticizes L. Ron Hubbard for "overtly fascist utterances." p. 47 Scientology for "protecting the home, the church, the family, decent morals...(no wife swapping)...national boundaries, the concept of RIGHT AND WRONG." "Which side are you on Hubbard which side are you on?" p. 48
- Claims oppression of Scientology for undoing human conditioning, in the same fashion as psychiatrist Wilhelm Reich by the FDA. "The medical profession is suppressing Reich's orgone accumulator and his discoveries relative to the use and dangers of orgonic energy. They are suppressing Dianetics and Scientology discovered by Mr L. Ron Hubbard." p. 60
- "There is every indication that the discoveries of Scientology are being used by the CIA and other official agencies." p. 65 Compares to state and military experimentation with LSD, though does not mention the CIA's Project MKULTRA directly. p. 66
- An additional reference to Burroughs' belief in apomorphine to effectively treat heroin addiction. Claims it is suppressed by the government and medical industry for the same reasons as Scientology and Reich's orgone theories. p. 122
- Burroughs says that Hubbard claims "that certain words and and word combinations an produce serious illnesses and mental disturbances. I can claim some skill in the scriveners trade, but I cannot guarantee to write a passage that will make someone physically ill. If Mr. Hubbard's claim is justified, this is certainly a matter for further research, and we can easily find out experimentally whether his cliam is justified or not." Hubbard's "engram theory is very easily subject to to experimental verification. Take ten volunteer subjects, subject them to a pain stimulus accompanied by certain words and sounds and images. You can act out little skits." pp. 190–191
Now must be established is how they should be incorporated into the article. Sir Richardson (talk) 22:08, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
- Not sure this is useful. It appears to be primary source description, devoid of secondary source commentary or any indication at all as to why this particular material is specifically noteworthy of inclusion here. -- Cirt (talk) 02:18, 24 January 2011 (UTC)
- Agree with Cirt. Since Burroughs is the author of the interviews, we cannot take this material and integrate it into the article. Only non-controversial, descriptive statements can be sourced to primary sources (see WP:PRIMARY) and in the case of Scientology on Misplaced Pages, everything is controversial, so we really need to have secondary sources. Thanks for your interest, though, Sir Richardson. Let us know if we can explain these issues further. Awadewit (talk) 04:11, 27 January 2011 (UTC)