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This is the article concerning the Sci-Fi convention in Southwest Louisiana This is the article concerning the Sci-Fi convention in Southwest Louisiana. We did reverify references and they do work.


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Convention du Lac

This is the article concerning the Sci-Fi convention in Southwest Louisiana. We did reverify references and they do work.

http://en.wikipedia.org/Convention_du_Lac

Jtoney7852 (talk) 00:46, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

There seems to be a problem with the references in the article; you can ask at the Misplaced Pages Help Desk. Chevymontecarlo 07:34, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

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Leigh Robert Davis

Requiring review: Leigh Robert Davis (20 June 1955 - 3 October 2009) was a New Zealand-based writer who created long poems and large-scale, mixed-media projects in which he worked with painters, designers and composers. He was known for the highly experimental nature of his creative work...

Dv8kiwi (talk) 07:21, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

I think you need to work on adding more references to the article, particularly to the first parts of the 'Career' section. Chevymontecarlo 07:40, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/User:Jestalk/FACT

Jestalk (talk) 13:58, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

Instead of using bold text for the sections, I think you need to use proper section headers, like this:
==Examples==

which creates a new section with 'Examples' as the name. You also need to remove the Facebook reference (which shouldn't be in there as per the rules at WP:CITE) and add some names to the external links. Finally I think you need to add more references to the article as well. Chevymontecarlo 07:37, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/Dyslexia_Action

This is one of my first articles -is it sound? Have I abided to wiki-protocol?

Adam Trepczynski (talk) 14:10, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

Try and add some names to the references and also perhaps an infobox. Chevymontecarlo 07:29, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

Ian Hall

Hi, I am new to this and have just placed a Welsh Rugby International into the system. I have wrongly linked this person to another with the same name.


1690wizard (talk) 14:43, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/User:TheWhiteNinja66/Mark_Hillman_(Money_Manager)

TheWhiteNinja66 (talk) 14:49, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

I think you need to add more references and links to the article, as it is certainly lacking. Finally, consider adding an infobox. Chevymontecarlo - alt 06:59, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

User:Adamultimatelife/Magic_Wand_Foundation

New article needs to be reviewed

We are a non-profit, 501(c)3, called the Magic Wand Foundation operating out of Roswell, Georgia. The content used in our Misplaced Pages article is our original content written by the founders.

MagicWandFoundation.org Official Magic Wand Foundation Website

UltimateLifeSummit.com Ultimate Life Summit Website

UltimateLifeUniversity Ultimate Life University Website

MyUltimateLife.com MyUltimateLife.com Social Network

Adamultimatelife (talk) 16:18, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/St_John%27s_Church,_Peasedown_St_John

New article needs to be reviewed.


Robert Withers (talk) 16:31, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

I think the article's tone needs to be worked on; it sounds like an advertisement in places. Chevymontecarlo - alt 07:23, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/Haken_(Band)

Hi, I wanted someone to review this article. Haken is a progressive rock band with one studio album out, and they are significant enough to hold a page. Their debut album can be found here : Aquarius (Haken album). thanks.

Andy (talk) 17:46, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

I see you took action on my suggestion :) Well done! It's a good article, but you need more references to add to the article, to make the article's subject more notable. Chevymontecarlo - alt 07:19, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/User:Dudeinhammock/Sex_at_Dawn

Hi. My first entry on Misplaced Pages. It's about a book I co-authored. I thought it best to ask for feedback before advancing the page. Thank you.


Dudeinhammock (talk) 21:22, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

You need more references, and also you need to add names to the references you already have. You can remove the example.com external link as it's just there to show you how to add external links. I also think you need to add some categories to the article as well, although that is not as important. Finally, I think you need to consider adding an infobox as well. Hope all of this is helpful! Please send me a message if you have any more questions! Chevymontecarlo - alt 07:15, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/Hector_L_Torres

New Article needs to be reviewed


12345standard (talk) 23:05, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

Try and add some names to the references and external links. Also, you need to add some categories to the article that actually exist - the two you have at the moment don't exist anywhere. Finally, consider adding a picture and infobox. Thanks, and I hope all this is helpful. Please send me a message if you have a question or comment. Chevymontecarlo - alt 07:09, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

Jamie Drake

New article that needs to be reviewed. Strohlnco (talk) 23:06, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

Strohlnco (talk) 23:06, 17 August 2010 (UTC)

Try and add some names to the external links, like this:
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Hope this is useful. Chevymontecarlo - alt 07:01, 18 August 2010 (UTC)