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| == Contributing information to William L. Uanna == | |||
| This evening I added a few images to Wikimedia. They are photographs and an FBI background investigation conducted for the Atomic Energy Commission. The FBI document verifies Uanna's service as head of investigations at First Service Command Boston and with Tenth Corps. In addition I included a picture of Uanna with the mission to Nagasaki to study bomb damage and a picture of him at a US Marine Security Guard Graduation. And there are some other pictures. I have hundreds of documents and pictures from his personal file and FOI requests. I have Uanna's Foreign Service Essay which is very informative. And employment applications that he filled out for the various jobs he held, each one giving more information on the other. Some of the people who are the recipients of the documents are David Lilienthal, Carroll Wilson, J. Edgar Hoover, Sheffield Edwards, Edward Lansdale, Mickey Ladd, V.P. Keay, Otto Otepka and others... I have over 50 newspaper clippings form his days as an athlete at Medford High School and Tufts University. And many newspaper and magazine articles about his career during the war and after. This is the first time I used Wikimedia, I did it under the name CIC777, category Bud Uanna. At this point I am unfamiliar with the process. I have a number of FBI Documents that I feel are very interesting. And the one from Ed Lansdale could have some significance. I appreciate the editing that has been done on this site and want to help clear up any questions about Uanna's bona fides. | |||
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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 08:56, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- Hello! I'll take this one. Full review to follow in due course. Moswento 08:56, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- Sources
Before I continue with this review, I have a major concern with the sources for this article. Currently, the majority of the article seems to be referenced to questionable sources. However, I may have misunderstood, and the prose is very good, so I'm leaving this open for you to respond.
- Ancestry.com - Aren't these just user-generated family trees?
- Pretty much, but it is only used for his parents' names. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- WW2enlistment.org - I realise you only use this for an enlistment date, but this appears to be a self-confessed potentially unreliable source. "We have reason to believe there is some information on the enlistee that might contain inaccuracies or data quality issues."
- Yes, it is only used for his enlistment date. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- "Short Biograpical Sketch" - this is currently used to source the majority of the article. My concern is two-fold. 1) As a biographical statement written by Uanna himself, relying so heavily on it raises questions of reliability. 2) How do we know it's even authentic?
- Its authenticity is vouched for by the MPHRA. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- My main concern is still not the fact that it's used, but its frequency. See new comment below. Moswento 10:31, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
- Its authenticity is vouched for by the MPHRA. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- "Assassination as Non-Proliferation" - I cannot see a blog comment meeting WP:RS
- History News Network - as above
- HNN is a reliable source. But what we are actually sourcing is his son's comments, which supports what the article says avout his son. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- The comments are not just used to support statements about his son, but about his career. Moswento 10:31, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
- HNN is a reliable source. But what we are actually sourcing is his son's comments, which supports what the article says avout his son. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
I'm sorry, but I am still not convinced that the article in its current form meets the GA criteria for verifiability. Overall, the article is well-written and a pleasure to read, but the main core of the article is referenced to "questionable sources" - i.e. sources closely connected with the subject that have been "published" without any apparent fact-checking or editorial oversight. The entire CIC section (except the first sentence) is referenced to such a source, and two other such sources are used a total of 7 times. This includes not just minor biographical details, but whole sections of his career, including achievements and figures etc. Some of this could be fixed using the two NYT articles, but you may still disagree with my assessment. If that is the case, would you like me to request a second opinion on this review? Moswento 10:31, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
- No, I think that I need to withdraw the article and redo the sourcing. Hawkeye7 (talk) 19:32, 4 December 2013 (UTC)
- OK, I'll close this as unsuccessful for now. Keep up the good work with these Manhattan Project articles. Moswento 09:30, 5 December 2013 (UTC)
- Text
Some of the text issues I spotted before the source issues temporarily halted my review:
- Lead: "I Service Command" - links to an article that doesn't seem to mention "I Service Command"
- Nope. That's the correct article. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- Lead: "After the he" - Is there a missing word here?
- Yes. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- Early life: "he attended Medford High School." - this doesn't follow from the rest of the sentence
- Re-phrased. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- Early life: "Massachusetts where" - "Massachusetts, where"
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
- CIC: "After the atomic bombing of Hiroshima and Nagasaki in and" - missing word between "in" and "and"?
- Removed "and" Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)