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Revision as of 03:47, 3 July 2008
GA Review
Hello. I'll be performing the GA review for this article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:
- Try to avoid using the word "would" before a verb, except in special circumstances. It makes the text too passive. Instead, remove would and make the verb past tense. For example: "By 1986 their releases would begin to establish the hip hop album as a fixture of the mainstream." --> "By 1986 their releases began to establish the hip hop album as a fixture of the mainstream."
- This is mandatory by any means, but can there be a picture in the top-right corner of the article? Most users are used to seeing an infobox/picture in that corner anyway, and it kind of stands out when there isn't something there. Maybe a free-use image of one of the performers mentioned in the article?
- didn't --> did not - avoid contractions in the text unless it is part of a quote
- "Kool Moe Dee's infamous verbal personal attacks" - remove infamous per words to avoid at WP:PEACOCK
- "and perhaps her greatest record, "Have a Nice Day" (1987)." - too point of view
- Several of the references in the endnotes need to be combined. For example: 19 and 20; 43 and 44
- Web citations need to include an access date.
That's it. The article will be on hold for seven days to allow for improvements. Nikki311 23:05, 30 June 2008 (UTC)
- 86.44.16.82 (talk · contribs · WHOIS) has been blocked for one week for trolling and WP:POINT violations. Nishkid64 (Make articles, not wikidrama) 00:33, 1 July 2008 (UTC)
- Normal service has been resumed. Thanks so much, Nikki, I'll be acting on those suggestions within a couple of days at most. 86.44.16.82 (talk) 23:12, 1 July 2008 (UTC)
- Alright. I'm glad to see everything was worked out. Nikki311 03:47, 3 July 2008 (UTC)