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Cite to BMJ on why people smoke (because addicted -- want and try to quit but can't)

http://bmj.bmjjournals.com/cgi/content/full/335/7609/37?fmr

"Cross sectional studies show that most smokers in countries such as the United Kingdom and the United States report that they want to stop and intend to stop at some point.1 The rate of attempts to stop is high—78 attempts per 100 smokers per year in the UK—with many smokers making several attempts in a year.2 Nearly half of all smokers expect not to be smoking in a year's time,3 but only 2-3% actually stop permanently each year.3

The most common reasons smokers give for smoking are stress relief and enjoyment,4 but the main reason is nicotine dependence. Nicotine acts in the midbrain, creating impulses to smoke in the face of stimuli associated with smoking.5 Consequent changes in brain chemistry also produce "nicotine hunger" when a smoker goes without nicotine. A third mechanism underlying nicotine dependence is nicotine withdrawal: unpleasant mood and physical symptoms that occur on abstinence and are relieved by smoking.6 7 Nicotine dependence is the main reason that most unassisted quit attempts fail within a week.8 We give evidence based recommendations and new treatment options for healthcare professionals to increase the success rate of these attempts. Most evidence for treatment comes from randomised controlled trials summarised in the Cochrane reviews for tobacco dependence.

2009 Copyedit, Layout, and Coordination Log

I'll add notes about the layout of this article as I go. There is an overemphasis and somewhat loose or poor organization in health effects, reasons for take up, and so forth. This article exceeds 65KB and under WP:SIZE is open for spinoffs, which move individual sections into their own articles and a summery section would be created in its place (WP:SPINOFF, WP:SUMMARY). There is an omission of the a potential history section, which would take combine the histories of the histories of tobacco and histories of smoking.

So far I have completed the "Demographics" section, which exports responsibility to its main article Prevalence of tobacco consumption (formerly Tobacco demographics); and reorganized the "Consumption" section. "Health effects" would be difficult to reorganize since it contains information not found in the main article, Health effects of tobacco. ChyranandChloe (talk) 23:44, 14 February 2009 (UTC) Health effects reorganization:

• "Establishing a link between smoking and health effects" → "Historical links"; self-reference, unnecessarily long, discusses only the historical aspects.
• "Health risks of smoking" → "Effects"; possible rename, self-reference
• "Lung dysfunction" → "Pulmonary"; dysfunction is inherently both non-neutral and somewhat unencyclopedic, we also want to introduce the reader to the vocabulary used in the sources and in the main article
• "Effects on the heart" → "Cardiovascular"; self-references to section title, unnecessarily long, introduction to the vocabulary used in the sources and the main article
• merge "Somatic and psychological effects" and "Mood and anxiety disorders" → "Psychological"; possible rename, it combines the central points of these two subsections, moved under "Effects"
• "Health benefits of smoking" → "Benefits"; self-reference, unnecessarily long; inherently non-neutral (negative effects/positive) section title, should be merged into relevant sections (e.g. self treatment for schizophrenics, merged into Psycological).

The remaining section titles in the article have been renamed to be shorter, however it remains to organize them into something more digestible to the reader. ChyranandChloe (talk) 00:35, 15 February 2009 (UTC)

Ok, the first step is complete, the sections are named according to the central point of their content—so the next step would be to resection according to related topics. After that, looking for the undue weight should not be easier and we can move them to the appropriate articles. We'll look for the omissions and resection to reflect those topics not adequately discussed when the weigh is distributed evenly to the relevant topics.

I'm sorry if the last two edits did not appear to be as constructive as the previous edits, layout is extremely difficult in large articles; which is why I left this one alone for so long. ChyranandChloe (talk) 00:55, 15 February 2009 (UTC)

Similarities are merged or grouped together to form more consistent sections with a simpler organization style, this makes it more accessible to the reader searching for specific sections of the article, and also furthers the article to be more focused on its topics. The following actions explains the transition from to :

• "Consumption" contains the former sections of "Consumption", "Patterns" ("Consumption patterns"), and "Demographics"
• "Consumption influences" have been moved below "Consumption"; since immediately following how and who consumes tobacco, a logical progression would be to answer why
• "Health effects" remains where it is
• "Smoking cessation" and "Tobacco and other drugs" have been merged with "Health effects"
• "Social and economic impact" has been dissolved and it's subsections renamed to "Economic" and "Cultural" —thereby increasing the scope of these two subsections
• "Economic", "Cultural", and "Religious" (renamed from "Religious views") are subsectioned under "Impact"
• "Restrictions" is renamed to "Public policy"
• "Age" in "Public policy", which essentially discusses the age bans are merged with "Bans"
• "Warnings" is merged with "Advertising" since both convey the central point of restrictions and regulations on communications

Away from that, it's becoming clearer now that Health effects needs to be trimmed and moved to its main article Health effects of tobacco. However, the extent is certainly subjective. There are two methods of doing this:

1. The first is the minimalist approach (one subsection under "Impact"), which would push to the reader to the main article if they want more on the health effects, this also lets us discuss the topic on its own grounds—and would allow push them, rather forcefully, to view the entire picture.
2. The second would be to have health effects as its own section with a number of subsections. By weight, this is a critical section, as the health effects is the primary motivator for the impacts section and the public policy section, which work towards minimizing the adverse effects (mainly health). One issue though, is this could draw attention away from the main article, which from the available page view statistics are not very good.Tobacco smoking Health effects of tobacco

In either case the section will need to be cut down and the two article synced. No content at this point have been deleted or moved to other articles. Some opinions would be nice—to know that I'm not doing this alone. ChyranandChloe (talk) 08:49, 15 February 2009 (UTC)

Cleanup has begun for the Health effects section:

• The History section has been moved to Health effects of tobacco.
• Indirect effects renamed to Product safety has been moved from Health effects of tobacco to "Public policy"
• "Tobacco and other drugs" renamed to "Social" under "Impact", it discusses how tobacco may be used as a gateway drug.
• "Smoking cessation" has been exported to the main article, it may be reentered at a later time when the article is more complete and focused
• I'm holding off on the remainder of the Health effects section until a more appropriate summery section can be prepared. ChyranandChloe (talk) 06:57, 16 February 2009 (UTC)

(outdent) The Health effect section has been migrated to the main article Health effects of tobacco, and a summery section created in its place. The Passive smoking section has not been moved. The next few section will likely be centered at Consumption influences section and the Passive smoking section. A longer summery section should be derived from the lead of Health effects of tobacco, however that would be difficult to do until the article has completed its copy edit. ChyranandChloe (talk) 05:33, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Looking for similarities between subsection I've managed to cut it down to a few core topics. It'll be a while before I can summarize and cleanup the prose for easier reading, and a while longer to get a history section in—however the article is taking shape. Other than that, I'm trying something new: there are only two links in the See also, rather than devote an entire section to it, I've dropped the section and added a navigational template to it. In the future an infobox (part of the Series on Smoking) may be more effective, but we aren't there yet. ChyranandChloe (talk) 00:53, 1 March 2009 (UTC)

History section is effectively complete thanks to the developments in the article Smoking coupled with the coordination of several other articles. Looking back, one question that remains to me is why the original history section, found in the oldids, were removed. For example, in the July 2006 the article had a fairly lengthy history section, half of it was cited, however as the edits progressed from that point the history section was dissolved. There were attempts to create a History of tobacco smoking main article, however that was cut short in the April of 2007, when it was converted to a redirect. Conducting a search in the article archives, statements appear to circulate around that concept that the section was abandoned. User:Nmg20 might have some insight, he was around before I was.

The current article design appears to be close to completion. All relevant points are given adequate emphasis with a specific focus from which the reader may more readily access the information. The next phase would be to shorten several section using a summery-section design; specifically Psychology, the last two subsection in Impact, and Public policy are in need of this type of action. The two sections: Health effects and Cessation, while being relevant to the subject, are also one of the shortest in the article. These two sections are awaiting a more effective summery section that can be directly derived from the lead of their constituting main article. The External links have been removed as both unnecessary and non-neutral. The items in the References and Further reading should accomplish the task of providing for a route to expand the reader's knowledge. Further reading may receive the same treatment as the External links, however I am leaving it alone. Once the body have been effectively written a new lead can be derived, likely to be five paragraphs (the number of major relevant sections in this article) it may be used as a summery section if we wish to use this in other articles.

Article coordination between this article and the Smoking are of interest. Described in greater detail in Talk:Smoking. Currently I am defining this article as the most common practice of the consuming of tobacco. It does not receive the {{tobacco}} infobox since the agricultural product is only the substance used, the practice, however is perhaps a better context to place it in. ChyranandChloe (talk) 06:00, 14 March 2009 (UTC)

The subsection "Cultural" under "Psycology" was moved to Tobacco advertising, parts of it were moved to the subsection "Social" under "Impact". A minor migration from the main article Smoking was moved into a new subsection "Consumption factors", this new subsection was then merged with "Personal relationships" and "Continued consumption". The last paragraph in "Social" was moved under Psychology under a new subsection titled "Gateway drug theory". Restrictions got several cuts as a large amount of content was moved to Tobacco advertising, this section still requires cleanup, but it's getting there. See also was removed as a redundancy in the context of the {{Smoking}} infobox. There are a slight reordering of the content, and parse cleanup, but those are insignificant.

One of the thoughts that come to mind while looking back is the concept of an "Impact" section. While "Effects" may be clearer, they idea of listing or covering all the effects of a particular subject may certainly be too much. For example, Health effects of tobacco can be tremendous in the context of this article. Instead "Impact" effectively limits the scope of its subsections to: "What are the key points, or where effects have left their mark". ChyranandChloe (talk) 22:53, 15 March 2009 (UTC)

Added "Physiology" subsection under "Consumption", moved "Patterns" to be under "Psychology". The last paragraph in Physiology may warrant a better source, however brining up the rest of the article is more important. "Consumption factors" appears to be reaching a point where an article may be created for it. Patterns may need more content, and Gateway drug theory seems somewhat odd, but relevant. ChyranandChloe (talk) 04:57, 16 March 2009 (UTC)

Updated "Physiology" to be more descriptive of the receptors and to some degree the effects. All region or country specific was cut in "Demographics". The sixth paragraph in the subsection "Popularization" was cut for irrelevance. "Psychology" was redivided along logical lines. The remaining sections still need to be cleaned up, or rather their main articles need to be cleaned up so a more effective summery section can be derived from the main article's lead. Trying something new in "Gallery". I'm not doing a "See also" since this can easily be accomplished with the Smoking infobox; or a "External links". Therefore "Gallery" appears to be the best candidate for the sister project links. This action is consistent under WP:LAYOUT as guidelines are inherently advisory in nature, and under the WP:MOS stability clause as reasons go beyond a mere choice in style. Going through "Further reading" a number of the links can be either used or cut. Switching the citation style to {{Harvnb}} with {{Citations}}. ChyranandChloe (talk) 03:20, 21 March 2009 (UTC)

2009 Copyedit, Prose, and Citation Log

Layout and article coordination is effectively complete. The next step would of course be the prose which ties itself in with neutrality and verification. Researched and verified content is not easy to write, it takes thorough reading and careful articulation. Below is the old lead, found in :

Below are sources that were not used in inline verification:

• Boffetta P, Agudo A, Ahrens W; et al. (1998). "Multicenter case-control study of exposure to environmental tobacco smoke and lung cancer in Europe". J Natl Cancer Inst. 90 (19): 1440–50. doi:10.1093/jnci/90.19.1440. PMID 9776409. {{cite journal}}: Explicit use of et al. in: |author= (help); Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
• Borio, G., 2006. The Tobacco Timeline. Tobacco.org.
• Centers for Disease Control and Prevention (CDC). 2004. History of the 1964 Surgeon General's Report on Smoking and Health.
• James I of England. 1604. A Counterblaste to Tobacco.
• Physicians, American College of Chest; Society, American Thoracic; Respirology, Asia Pacific Society of; Society, Canadian Thoracic; Society, European Respiratory; Disease, International Union Against Tuberculosis and Lung (1995). "Smoking and health: physician responsibility. A statement of the Joint Committee on Smoking and Health. American College of Chest Physicians. American Thoracic Society. Asia Pacific Society of Respirology. Canadian Thoracic Society. European Respiratory Society, and International Union Against Tuberculosis and Lung Disease". Chest. 108 (4): 1118–21. PMID 7555125. {{cite journal}}: Unknown parameter |day= ignored (help); Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
• Almeida OP, Hulse GK, Lawrence D, Flicker L (2002). "Smoking as a risk factor for Alzheimer's disease: contrasting evidence from a ] of case-control and cohort studies". Addiction. 97 (1): 15–28. doi:10.1046/j.1360-0443.2002.00016.x. PMID 11895267. {{cite journal}}: URL–wikilink conflict (help); Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
• Smoking cessation methods compared Smoking cessation methods compared. Smokingrelief.co.uk.
• BBC news (2007) Scots 'back smoke ban exemptions'

Below are sources previous contained in the section "Further reading":

• Canadian Children's Rights Council. "Ban Smoking In Cars with Children". Ontario Medical Association.
• Brandt AM (2007). The cigarette century: the rise, fall and deadly persistence of the product that defined America. New York: Basic Books. ISBN 0-465-07047-7.
• Gately I (2001). La diva nicotina: the story of how tobacco seduced the world. New York: Simon & Schuster. ISBN 0-7432-0812-9.
• David Krough (1992). Smoking: The Artificial Passion. W.H. Freeman & Company. ISBN 0-7167-2347-6.
• Invernizzi G, Ruprecht A, Mazza R; et al. (2004). "Particulate matter from tobacco versus diesel car exhaust: an educational perspective". Tob Control. 13 (3): 219–21. doi:10.1136/tc.2003.005975. PMC 1747905. PMID 15333875. {{cite journal}}: Explicit use of et al. in: |author= (help); Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
• Tyrrell IR (1999). Deadly enemies: tobacco and its opponents in Australia. Sydney, Australia: UNSW Press. ISBN 0-86840-745-3.
• Burnham JC (1993). Bad habits: drinking, smoking, taking drugs, gambling, sexual misbehavior, and swearing in American history. New York: New York University Press. ISBN 0-8147-1224-X.
• Givel MS, Glantz SA (2001). "Tobacco lobby political influence on US state legislatures in the 1990s". Tob Control. 10 (2): 124–34. doi:10.1136/tc.10.2.124. PMC 1747563. PMID 11387532. {{cite journal}}: Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)
• Goodman, Jordan Elliot (1993). Tobacco in history: the cultures of dependence. New York: Routledge. ISBN 0-415-11669-4.
• Kluger R (1996). Ashes to ashes: America's hundred-year cigarette war, the public health, and the unabashed triumph of Philip Morris. New York: Alfred A. Knopf. ISBN 0-394-57076-6.
• Walker RL (1984). Under fire: a history of tobacco smoking in Australia. Carlton, Vic: Melbourne University Press. ISBN 0-522-84279-8.
• Harley D (1993). "The beginnings of the tobacco controversy: puritanism, James I, and the royal physicians". Bull Hist Med. 67 (1): 28–50. PMID 8461637.
• Hendricks PS, Ditre JW, Drobes DJ, Brandon TH (2006). "The early time course of smoking withdrawal effects". Psychopharmacology (Berl.). 187 (3): 385–96. doi:10.1007/s00213-006-0429-9. PMID 16752139. {{cite journal}}: Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
• Ness RB, Grisso JA, Hirschinger N; et al. (1999). "Cocaine and tobacco use and the risk of spontaneous abortion". N Engl J Med. 340 (5): 333–9. doi:10.1056/NEJM199902043400501. PMID 9929522. {{cite journal}}: Explicit use of et al. in: |author= (help); Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
• Oncken C, Kranzler H, O'Malley P, Gendreau P, Campbell WA (2002). "The effect of cigarette smoking on fetal heart rate characteristics" ( – ). Obstet Gynecol. 99 (5 Pt 1): 751–5. doi:10.1016/S0029-7844(02)01948-8. PMID 11978283. {{cite journal}}: External link in |format= (help); Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
• Venners SA, Wang X, Chen C; et al. (2004). "Paternal smoking and pregnancy loss: a prospective study using a biomarker of pregnancy". Am J Epidemiol. 159 (10): 993–1001. doi:10.1046/j.1360-0443.2002.00016.x. PMID 15128612. {{cite journal}}: Explicit use of et al. in: |author= (help); Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list (link)
• "Health : Young smokers' heart attack risk". BBC. Retrieved December 18, 2005.
• WHO East Mediterranean Regional Office. Islamic ruling on smoking. Cairo: WHO East Mediterranean Regional Office, 2003. This publication cites anti-smoking Fatwas.
• Gatrad AR, Sheikh A (2001). "Medical ethics and Islam: principles and practice". Arch Dis Child. 84 (1): 72–75. doi:10.1136/adc.84.1.72. PMC 1718617. PMID 11124793. {{cite journal}}: Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)
• Ask the Imam. "Is smoking cigarettes haram?" accessed July 25, 2006
• Jibaly M (1996). "Smoking: A Social Poison". Detroit: Al-Qur'an was-Sunnah Society of North America. Retrieved July 25, 2006.
  Cites seven different Islamic law opinions.
• Islam Online. "Is the ruling on smoking still controversial?" accessed July 25, 2006 This analysis based primarily on the quoted opinion of Sheikh Yusuf Al-Qaradawi.

Citations are consistent up until the section "Psychology", which requires a convention to the {{Citation}} template system. The remaining section have yet to receive a new summery section from its associated article, or still requires copyediting. There are several gaps in the citations of the first paragraph in the lead, and the one pertaining to "Tobacco Master Settlement Agreement" appears to be dubious. News sources are often not considered as a reliable source. Direct page numbers would help improve the verification process several citations. ChyranandChloe (talk) 10:59, 22 March 2009 (UTC)

Removed from History. Completely unverified (WP:V) and lacking relevance within the History section. These topics do not cover the historical aspects, but the moral. These sections have been deferred to the main article Religious views on smoking with a summery section flowing into the "Social" subsection, which is under "Impact".

Added Vaporizer to "Methods", cleaned pieces of the lead to use a more exact language. Removed the last sentence in the History section. It's been a while, but it's good to be back. ChyranandChloe (talk) 00:34, 11 May 2009 (UTC)

Prompt for anti-smoking groups in 1920s

I changed "With the industrialization of production and increased life expectancies in the late 1920s prompted anti-smoking groups to advocacate against its usage", which is not a proper sentence, to "The industrialization of production and increased life expectancies in the late 1920s prompted anti-smoking groups to advocacate against its usage", which is at least grammatically correct but I'm not convinced I got across the meaning the sentence is meant to convey. I admit I'm not sure exactly what this sentence is trying to say, can someone knowledgable clarify this? Tav-dogg (talk) 13:02, 13 April 2009 (UTC)

Changed it to "The industrialization of tobacco production compounded with increased health awareness during the late 1920s prompted a strong anti-smoking political agenda." This probably better fits what I was trying to convey when I first wrote the lead. The political agenda, of course, refers to the sentence immediately following the one discussed. ChyranandChloe (talk) 00:34, 11 May 2009 (UTC)

Minor edits that I can't make

There's a link to "Preacher" that needs to be changed to "Preacher (comics)". Since this article is protected against anonymous edits, someone else will have to do it. 66.232.165.24 (talk) 22:38, 29 April 2009 (UTC)

Also, the following line needs to be re-written:

"Similarly, cigarette smoking activity has been shown to follow distinct circadian patterns during the waking day, with the high point usually occurring shortly after waking in the morning or going to sleep at night."

While technically correct, this sentence (on first reading) seems to suggest that people smoke quite a lot after going to sleep at night...maybe change it to "or shortly before going to sleep at night." —Preceding unsigned comment added by 150.101.19.57 (talk) 03:29, 7 May 2009 (UTC)

 Done Thanks. Sorry I couldn't fix this earlier, I was on break and despite this article being highly visible, it doesn't receive that much editor traffic. ChyranandChloe (talk) 00:34, 11 May 2009 (UTC)

Notable people who have died from smoking

I think there should be an article that is a list of famous people who have died from smoking-related illness. That'd be interesting to see. Kag427 (talk) 15:40, 3 June 2009 (UTC)

Same said on Talk:Health effects of tobacco. I don't believe that this subject would be prudent to the main subject of the article, however you can start a new article title Notable deaths attributable to tobacco consumption, and it could be linked through either the infobox, footerbox, or as a {{See also}} navigational link in one of the sections. ChyranandChloe (talk) 16:20, 3 June 2009 (UTC)

1. Smoking Statistics WHO Fact Sheet May 28, 2002
2. List of health effects by CDC
3. List of health effects by Australia's myDr
4. Tobacco Could Kill One Billion By 2100, WHO Report Warns Science Daily February 8, 2008
5. Tobacco could kill more than 1 billion this century: WHO Australian Broadcasting Corporation February 8, 2008

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