Revision as of 10:43, 27 May 2015 edit182.249.0.162 (talk) Clearly not "generally resolved". CurtisNaito, please do not try to remove or hide others' legitimate concerns. I posted SPECIFICALLY so that the reviewer WOULD check the STILL-UNRESOLVED sourcing problems.← Previous edit | Revision as of 01:39, 31 May 2015 edit undoSturmvogel 66 (talk | contribs)Autopatrolled, Extended confirmed users, Page movers, New page reviewers, Pending changes reviewers, Rollbackers131,580 edits →GA ReviewNext edit → | ||
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::::::::When you write a biography for Misplaced Pages, you have to use the sources that exist, not the sources which you might like to exist. For instance, there is a '''featured''' level article on ] in which almost all the citations refer to a self-published book by a private author which has never existed in any other format than a privately-held CD-rom. That's all that existed, so that's what the article used. Of course, Hayasaka and Hayase are quite a bit superior to that because they are both established writers and researchers working with major publication firms. So far you have presented no evidence that they are unreliable, except for repeating the fact that they are not professional historians. However, it's common on Misplaced Pages to cite books written by journalists and non-fiction writers who are not necessarily trained historians. As long as a source is reliable, there is no rule which says that only degree-bearing historians may be cited in a Misplaced Pages history article.] (]) 16:31, 25 May 2015 (UTC) | ::::::::When you write a biography for Misplaced Pages, you have to use the sources that exist, not the sources which you might like to exist. For instance, there is a '''featured''' level article on ] in which almost all the citations refer to a self-published book by a private author which has never existed in any other format than a privately-held CD-rom. That's all that existed, so that's what the article used. Of course, Hayasaka and Hayase are quite a bit superior to that because they are both established writers and researchers working with major publication firms. So far you have presented no evidence that they are unreliable, except for repeating the fact that they are not professional historians. However, it's common on Misplaced Pages to cite books written by journalists and non-fiction writers who are not necessarily trained historians. As long as a source is reliable, there is no rule which says that only degree-bearing historians may be cited in a Misplaced Pages history article.] (]) 16:31, 25 May 2015 (UTC) | ||
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'''Comments to all the above''' | |||
*I do not read Japanese and so cannot evaluate any sources in that language. | |||
*I disagree with your argument, Hijiri, that books and articles written by non-professional historians are inherently unreliable when used for a GA or better quality article. If they're unacceptably biased, prove it; the burden is indeed on you. | |||
*I am very much not fond of the citation style used in this article as I also strongly prefer a short cite of author, page #, backed up by a bibliography with full citations. That said we must all respect ] and CurtisNaito has been consistent in using his preferred method and need not make any changes to pass muster in this review. | |||
*{{xt|Matsuura, by comparison, is a professor of modern history whose book was published by a university press, and he is cited only 15 times; the last names him inline, but neither Hayasaka nor Hayase is named inline -- the reverse.}} I'm not following your argument here. What's wrong with how Matsuura is mentioned in the article? | |||
'''Review''' | |||
*No DABs, external links OK. | |||
*File:Matsui on trial.jpg and File:Iwane Matsui.jpg need a US license as well as a Japanese one. I think that <nowiki>{{PD-1996}}</nowiki> will be acceptable. | |||
*Link on first use, Kannon, bodhisattva, Second Sino-Japanese War, Nagoya, Russo-Japanese War, Greater Asia Association, major general, Jinan | |||
*Put the abbreviation for the tribunal in parentheses after its first mention. | |||
*{{xt|After winning the battle Matsui succeeded in convincing Japan's high command to advance on the Chinese capital city of Nanking, though after capturing the city on December 13 troops under his command committed the notorious Nanking Massacre.}} {{xt|Matsui retired from the army definitively in 1938, but after Japan's defeat in World War II he was charged with war crimes by the ] and was ultimately executed by hanging.}} These are rather long and convoluted. I suggest breaking them in half. | |||
* Briefly tell the reader why his classmates were important; if they all became future general, say so. | |||
*You do not need to have a citation for every sentence. If every fact in a paragraph is derived from the same source, then only a single cite at the end of the paragraph is necessary. Forex, cites 5 and 6 in the 3rd sentence of the first para of the main body can be deleted because they're both used in the last sentence of that paragraph. You've got cites splattered all over the article that can be profitably consolidated, so go through the article thoroughly and get rid of them. | |||
*Is Sei Arao notable enough for an article? If so then redlink his name. Read through everything up to the Chinese war section. More later.--] (]) 01:38, 31 May 2015 (UTC) |
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 18:48, 22 May 2015 (UTC)
I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:48, 22 May 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you for your interest.CurtisNaito (talk) 19:17, 22 May 2015 (UTC)
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The spelling of Japanese authors' and publishers' names, including macrons, should conform to WP:MOS-JA, unless there is some specific reason why they do not already. 182.249.216.8 (talk) 02:19, 23 May 2015 (UTC)
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Comments to all the above
- I do not read Japanese and so cannot evaluate any sources in that language.
- I disagree with your argument, Hijiri, that books and articles written by non-professional historians are inherently unreliable when used for a GA or better quality article. If they're unacceptably biased, prove it; the burden is indeed on you.
- I am very much not fond of the citation style used in this article as I also strongly prefer a short cite of author, page #, backed up by a bibliography with full citations. That said we must all respect WP:CITEVAR and CurtisNaito has been consistent in using his preferred method and need not make any changes to pass muster in this review.
- Matsuura, by comparison, is a professor of modern history whose book was published by a university press, and he is cited only 15 times; the last names him inline, but neither Hayasaka nor Hayase is named inline -- the reverse. I'm not following your argument here. What's wrong with how Matsuura is mentioned in the article?
Review
- No DABs, external links OK.
- File:Matsui on trial.jpg and File:Iwane Matsui.jpg need a US license as well as a Japanese one. I think that {{PD-1996}} will be acceptable.
- Link on first use, Kannon, bodhisattva, Second Sino-Japanese War, Nagoya, Russo-Japanese War, Greater Asia Association, major general, Jinan
- Put the abbreviation for the tribunal in parentheses after its first mention.
- After winning the battle Matsui succeeded in convincing Japan's high command to advance on the Chinese capital city of Nanking, though after capturing the city on December 13 troops under his command committed the notorious Nanking Massacre. Matsui retired from the army definitively in 1938, but after Japan's defeat in World War II he was charged with war crimes by the International Military Tribunal for the Far East and was ultimately executed by hanging. These are rather long and convoluted. I suggest breaking them in half.
- Briefly tell the reader why his classmates were important; if they all became future general, say so.
- You do not need to have a citation for every sentence. If every fact in a paragraph is derived from the same source, then only a single cite at the end of the paragraph is necessary. Forex, cites 5 and 6 in the 3rd sentence of the first para of the main body can be deleted because they're both used in the last sentence of that paragraph. You've got cites splattered all over the article that can be profitably consolidated, so go through the article thoroughly and get rid of them.
- Is Sei Arao notable enough for an article? If so then redlink his name. Read through everything up to the Chinese war section. More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:38, 31 May 2015 (UTC)