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| :I cleaned it up just a little by removing sentence fragments, for example, "Ideal for X" becomes "They are ideal for X". However, the text gets repetitive this way ("They are this, they are that..."), so it needs to be rewritten further. Also, the article needs to be consistent about "it" versus "they" when referring to a particular item ("It does have perforated sides" versus "They do have perforated sides"). - ] (]) 03:09, 16 November 2005 (UTC) | :I cleaned it up just a little by removing sentence fragments, for example, "Ideal for X" becomes "They are ideal for X". However, the text gets repetitive this way ("They are this, they are that..."), so it needs to be rewritten further. Also, the article needs to be consistent about "it" versus "they" when referring to a particular item ("It does have perforated sides" versus "They do have perforated sides"). - ] (]) 03:09, 16 November 2005 (UTC) | ||
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| Very funny article. A little pro-depend if you ask me. | Very funny article. A little pro-depend if you ask me. | ||
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This reads almost like a sales pamphlet that I had to google a line from it just to make sure it wasn't copied from somewhere. (The only hit that turned up was clearly taken from this article, so it seems it's not a copyvio at least.) It is informative, I just think the tone of the article needs a little work. - furrykef (Talk at me) 03:01, 16 November 2005 (UTC)
- I cleaned it up just a little by removing sentence fragments, for example, "Ideal for X" becomes "They are ideal for X". However, the text gets repetitive this way ("They are this, they are that..."), so it needs to be rewritten further. Also, the article needs to be consistent about "it" versus "they" when referring to a particular item ("It does have perforated sides" versus "They do have perforated sides"). - furrykef (Talk at me) 03:09, 16 November 2005 (UTC)
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Very funny article. A little pro-depend if you ask me. (bit of a waste of kilobytes). Theonlyedge 00:51, 25 February 2006 (UTC)