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| #The last paragraph said that Australians thought that something was "absurd". What Australians said this? Was this printed anywhere? Is there a quote that can be used like "Such and such leader of the Australian government stated in an interview that "X" was absurd"? | #The last paragraph said that Australians thought that something was "absurd". What Australians said this? Was this printed anywhere? Is there a quote that can be used like "Such and such leader of the Australian government stated in an interview that "X" was absurd"? | ||
| ::]|] 23:13, 28 March 2006 (UTC) | ::]|] 23:13, 28 March 2006 (UTC) | ||
| == Looks better - just a few more comments == | |||
| *Lead paragraph says he is currently a golf instructor. Last sentence says he is in prison. It is not clear what order these events are in. Needs clarifying. | |||
| *There is still no reference to articles published in Australia. | |||
| *Some copyediting is needed, but that is a lower priority than the other two comments. | |||
| If you then feel that the "clean-up" tag can be removed, I suggest you contact the person who put the tag on the page (you can find this out by looking in the page history). The person you want is ]. He may be able to say if he agrees that the tag can be removed. Hope that helps. ] 23:14, 29 March 2006 (UTC) | |||
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helpme
Hello!I edited this talk page because i don't know what is wrong with the page i edited-Dragan Vasiljković-so i would like someone to say something about it as soon as possible so i can fix it.I don't know why was that box placed on top of the article,but i would like to know what should i do to make it go away.--Captain ginyu 18:57, 28 March 2006 (UTC)
- Hi, the article was tagged with cleanup. From the article, it needs wikification, (making links), and needs spaces between punctuation. Let me know if you require assistance. :) Gflores 19:01, 28 March 2006 (UTC)
- The few things that I see that needed cleaning up would be:
- A citation for what issue of the journal The Australian had an article about the man, including date of publication
- Clean up the punctuation and grammar of the "War crimes" section
- The last paragraph said that Australians thought that something was "absurd". What Australians said this? Was this printed anywhere? Is there a quote that can be used like "Such and such leader of the Australian government stated in an interview that "X" was absurd"?
Looks better - just a few more comments
- Lead paragraph says he is currently a golf instructor. Last sentence says he is in prison. It is not clear what order these events are in. Needs clarifying.
- There is still no reference to articles published in Australia.
- Some copyediting is needed, but that is a lower priority than the other two comments.
If you then feel that the "clean-up" tag can be removed, I suggest you contact the person who put the tag on the page (you can find this out by looking in the page history). The person you want is User:Johntex. He may be able to say if he agrees that the tag can be removed. Hope that helps. Carcharoth 23:14, 29 March 2006 (UTC)