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Before I continue with this review, I have a major concern with the sources for this article. Currently, the majority of the article seems to be referenced to questionable sources. However, I may have misunderstood, and the prose is very good, so I'm leaving this open for you to respond. Before I continue with this review, I have a major concern with the sources for this article. Currently, the majority of the article seems to be referenced to questionable sources. However, I may have misunderstood, and the prose is very good, so I'm leaving this open for you to respond.
* Ancestry.com - Aren't these just user-generated family trees? * Ancestry.com - Aren't these just user-generated family trees?
** Pretty much, but it is only used for his parents' names. ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
* WW2enlistment.org - I realise you only use this for an enlistment date, but this appears to be a self-confessed potentially unreliable source. "We have reason to believe there is some information on the enlistee that might contain inaccuracies or data quality issues." * WW2enlistment.org - I realise you only use this for an enlistment date, but this appears to be a self-confessed potentially unreliable source. "We have reason to believe there is some information on the enlistee that might contain inaccuracies or data quality issues."
** Yes, it is only used for his enlistment date. ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
* "Short Biograpical Sketch" - this is currently used to source the majority of the article. My concern is two-fold. 1) As a biographical statement written by Uanna himself, relying so heavily on it raises questions of reliability. 2) How do we know it's even authentic? * "Short Biograpical Sketch" - this is currently used to source the majority of the article. My concern is two-fold. 1) As a biographical statement written by Uanna himself, relying so heavily on it raises questions of reliability. 2) How do we know it's even authentic?
** Its authenticity is vouched for by the MPHRA. ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
* "Assassination as Non-Proliferation" - I cannot see a blog comment meeting WP:RS * "Assassination as Non-Proliferation" - I cannot see a blog comment meeting WP:RS
* History News Network - as above * History News Network - as above
**HNN is a reliable source. But what we are actually sourcing is his son's comments, which supports what the article says avout his son. ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)


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Some of the text issues I spotted before the source issues temporarily halted my review: Some of the text issues I spotted before the source issues temporarily halted my review:
*Lead: "I Service Command" - links to an article that doesn't seem to mention "I Service Command" *Lead: "I Service Command" - links to an article that doesn't seem to mention "I Service Command"
**Nope. That's the correct article. ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
*Lead: "After the he" - Is there a missing word here? *Lead: "After the he" - Is there a missing word here?
**Yes. Corrected. ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
*Early life: "he attended Medford High School." - this doesn't follow from the rest of the sentence *Early life: "he attended Medford High School." - this doesn't follow from the rest of the sentence
**Re-phrased. ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
*Early life: "Massachusetts where" - "Massachusetts, where" *Early life: "Massachusetts where" - "Massachusetts, where"
**Done. ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)
*CIC: "After the atomic bombing of Hiroshima and Nagasaki in and" - missing word between "in" and "and"? *CIC: "After the atomic bombing of Hiroshima and Nagasaki in and" - missing word between "in" and "and"?
**Removed "and" ] (]) 11:32, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 08:56, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

Sources

Before I continue with this review, I have a major concern with the sources for this article. Currently, the majority of the article seems to be referenced to questionable sources. However, I may have misunderstood, and the prose is very good, so I'm leaving this open for you to respond.

  • Ancestry.com - Aren't these just user-generated family trees?
  • WW2enlistment.org - I realise you only use this for an enlistment date, but this appears to be a self-confessed potentially unreliable source. "We have reason to believe there is some information on the enlistee that might contain inaccuracies or data quality issues."
  • "Short Biograpical Sketch" - this is currently used to source the majority of the article. My concern is two-fold. 1) As a biographical statement written by Uanna himself, relying so heavily on it raises questions of reliability. 2) How do we know it's even authentic?
  • "Assassination as Non-Proliferation" - I cannot see a blog comment meeting WP:RS
  • History News Network - as above
Text

Some of the text issues I spotted before the source issues temporarily halted my review: