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	*Add more references, make sure everything in the article is cited.		*Add more references, make sure everything in the article is cited.
	*There is still a substantial amount of sloppy writing and stylistic inconsistencies and infelicities throughout the article; thorough copyedit needed:		*There is still a substantial amount of sloppy writing and stylistic inconsistencies and infelicities throughout the article; thorough copyedit needed:
	*The second sentence of the second paragraph in the lead section is indicative: "After the Rebel Alliance, led by Princess Leia, steals the plans in the hope of finding a weakness, they are captured and forced aboard the Death Star."
	*This is both subtly, though unquestionably, inaccurate (the "Rebel Alliance" is not "captured," Leia and part of her escort are) and obviously ungrammatical.
	*As another example, we later have a paragraph that begins, egregiously: "1958 Kurosawa film '']'' was a strong influence, many elements are included such as the two bickering peasants (who evolved into C-3PO and R2-D2), elements of the Obi-Wan/Luke relationship and the Darth Vader-like evil general wears a kamon, commonly called simply a 'mon', a Japanese family crest similar to the Imperial Crest."		*As another example, we later have a paragraph that begins, egregiously: "1958 Kurosawa film '']'' was a strong influence, many elements are included such as the two bickering peasants (who evolved into C-3PO and R2-D2), elements of the Obi-Wan/Luke relationship and the Darth Vader-like evil general wears a kamon, commonly called simply a 'mon', a Japanese family crest similar to the Imperial Crest."
	*As a final example, chosen virtually at random, examine the first sentence of the "]" section: "''Star Wars Episode IV: A New Hope'' debuted in 37 theaters and broke 36 house records, and effectively become the very first ] film."		*As a final example, chosen virtually at random, examine the first sentence of the "]" section: "''Star Wars Episode IV: A New Hope'' debuted in 37 theaters and broke 36 house records, and effectively become the very first ] film."

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Roger Ebert's review of Star Wars Episode IV: A New Hope
James Berardinelli's review of Star Wars Episode IV: A New Hope
In depth review of Star Wars Episode IV: A New Hope on Filmsite
Add more references, make sure everything in the article is cited.
There is still a substantial amount of sloppy writing and stylistic inconsistencies and infelicities throughout the article; thorough copyedit needed:
As another example, we later have a paragraph that begins, egregiously: "1958 Kurosawa film The Hidden Fortress was a strong influence, many elements are included such as the two bickering peasants (who evolved into C-3PO and R2-D2), elements of the Obi-Wan/Luke relationship and the Darth Vader-like evil general wears a kamon, commonly called simply a 'mon', a Japanese family crest similar to the Imperial Crest."
As a final example, chosen virtually at random, examine the first sentence of the "Reaction" section: "Star Wars Episode IV: A New Hope debuted in 37 theaters and broke 36 house records, and effectively become the very first blockbuster film."
This is untrue (Star Wars was by no reasonable reckoning the "first blockbuster film"), awkwardly stated (what does it mean to be, not the "first" or even the "very first," but "effectively the very first"?), and misspelled ("become"?!).
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