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|copyedit=* From Peer Review ''The Other Issues section of Criticism needs some work. At least four of the sentences start with "NIST" and all are very short. The section needs rewritten into stronger paragraphs. Also, I'm not sure why the Building Seven section below that has a bullet point in it.'' |
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|copyedit=* From Peer Review ''The Other Issues section of Criticism needs some work. At least four of the sentences start with "NIST" and all are very short. The section needs rewritten into stronger paragraphs. Also, I'm not sure why the Building Seven section below that has a bullet point in it.'' |
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* From Peer Review ''One thing I would note is that grammar and phrasing are very important for "Featured Articles." I noticed a few phrases in the introduction that were awkward at best. <s>Example: "The collapse of 7 World Trade Center (not hit by any plane)..." In this case, the interjection would flow much better if it was "which was not hit by a plane", or perhaps it should be removed entirely.</s> The whole article should be examined for tone by a seasoned editor.'' |
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* From Peer Review ''One thing I would note is that grammar and phrasing are very important for "Featured Articles." I noticed a few phrases in the introduction that were awkward at best. <s>Example: "The collapse of 7 World Trade Center (not hit by any plane)..." In this case, the interjection would flow much better if it was "which was not hit by a plane", or perhaps it should be removed entirely.</s> The whole article should be examined for tone by a seasoned editor.'' |
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*<s>From Peer Review: Add the names of the lead proponents to the opening paragraph. Note that this may mean that wikilinks to them may need to be removed lower down in the article</s> |
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