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The Emancipator's Wife

Hambly writes in the first sentence of the book's afterword, "The Emancipator's Wife is a work of fiction", so I've taken the liberty of changing the category to "historical fiction". Cactus Wren 00:42, 2 August 2006 (UTC)

Themes

Please understand using the proper syntax/ words is appropriate, even if you didn't place it. “Hambly has a penchant for genre-twisting characters” is an opinion of the person you are citing as a review, please note it is not a professional, nor peer review, but a reader review and again it is an opinion which makes the “ is said to have” not only appropriate but nessary, if you are going to keep the opinion and link. Secondly, “She also tends towards” in not proper grammar, and people do not use that syntax to speak. The fact that the reviewer thinks she offers up “rich descriptions and vivid characters is great, but improperly worded. SO I fixed it. Simply reverting my editing for the sake that it is not yours goes against Wiki policy. Please follow proper Wiki protocols. --Mystar 19:19, 3 October 2006 (UTC)

See Reverting for help --Mystar 19:44, 3 October 2006 (UTC)

Over All Editing

Previous occupations include a high-school teacher, a model, a waitress, a technical editor, an all-night liquor store clerk, and a karate instructor, occupations that she felt allowed her time to write.

Factual and accurate “She searched for a job that would allow her time to write”. Also “She attended University of California at Riverside, specializing in Medieval History and eventually earning a masters degree in 1975. She also spent time in Bordeaux, France as part of her studies”.

Is a very awkward wording, sounding like a run-on sentence structure. A better sentence structure is

” Hambly attended the University of California at Riverside in 1975, where she earned her Masters in Medieval History. As part of her studies, Hambly also spent a year in Bordeaux, France”.

It not only flows smoother but allows the reader to understand not only the significance of why she was in France, but the distinction between the two. Having the year 1975 at the end is proper formatting and gives the reader a time frame for what occurred. Keep in mind what occurred is the significant information followed by the not so significant dating of the time frame.

“Particularly cited was her work within the Star Wars universe, where she was praised for her spot-on character "voices", concise and rich in dialogue.”

Were you to take notice no where in the interview does it read Luke and Leah, it reads “spot-on character "voices", with no distinction on the specific character .

Misplaced Pages is an encyclepidic work, not the place for inflecting personal thoughts on what you want it to say, when the material doesn’t say it. Please keep in mind the Wikiepidia Help page for futrue editing help. This could help in eliminating future mistakes of content. I hope I've been helpful in your learning proccess--Mystar 18:29, 6 October 2006 (UTC)

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