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The following edit, ], appears to be vandalism. Hyacinth 20:48, 18 Oct 2004 (UTC)
- Sure looks like it to me.. She had a husband??? Not in any other bios of her I've read. She was deported by Teddy Roosevelt?? Again, not in other bios. Besides, she was a native-born citizen; how could she be deported? Will look further, but think it should be reverted..
- Very strange case, though. Doesn't look like most vandalism. Too Old 04:30, 2005 May 4 (UTC)
- Just noted the discrepancy of dates: 1903 - family moved back to Germany; later she moved to US and became politically active; 1903 - she was deported to Germany by Teddy Roosevelt, because of political activism. It gets reverted.. Too Old 04:42, 2005 May 4 (UTC)
- I would't worry about the dates; the changes were simple vandalism. Her father Daniel was a clothier, not a mill worker. She lived in the US not Germany, she was born in 1874, not 1847, she left the US of her own volition, she didn't marry any man, she wasn't a Nazi, and she didn't keep her rat feces in mason jars. Etc. - Nunh-huh 04:50, 4 May 2005 (UTC)
stein date of death
The article for July 27 lists Stein as being one of the people that died on that date. The article on Stein lists her date of death as July 29.
stein date of death
The article for July 27 lists Stein as being one of the people that died on that date. The article on Stein lists her date of death as July 29.
I'm new to Wiki so not sure how this works. Anyway, I just have a few style-related suggestions, mainly aimed at clarifying points that seem obscure. Let me know if I should be approaching this some other way, ok? Here goes?
In 1902 she moved to France during the height of artistic creativity gathering in Montparnasse. This sentence isn't good English. Perhaps it would be better expressed as: "She moved to France in 1902, at the height of the artistic and literary ferment centred on Montparnasse."
During her whole life, Stein was supported by a stipend from her brother Michael's business. Placed where it is, this gives the impression that it was brother Michael, and not brother Leo, who collaborated with Gertrude in the patronage of the Cubists. (Perhaps the sentence could be moved up to precede the paragraph about the move to Paris, and be made a very short paragraph in its own right?)
Extremely charming, eloquent, cheerful and overweight, she had a large circle of friends and tirelessly promoted herself. Her judgments in literature and art were highly influential. I think this sentence gives a misleading impression of GS as a mere self-promoter. Perhaps make it one sentence, reading: "Overweight, charming, cheerful and eloquent, she had a large circle of friends and her views on art and literature were highly influential."
"Several years later, Alice would contribute money to Faÿ's escape from prison", should be in simple past tense: "Several years later, Alice contributed money to Faÿ's escape from prison".
After the war, Gertrude's status in Paris grew when she was visited by many young American soldiers. I don't think this sentence is saying what you want it to say. Literally, you're saying that her status in Paris, but presumably not elsewhere, grew, as a result of the visits of US soldiers; what I think you may mean is that it was her status in the US that grew. Perhaps you could re-write this if I'm correct. (If I'm not then of course it's fine as it is).