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Ok!!
Right now I have written three pages, and I think that can be, if not enough perhaps for a chapter, then atleast its a good start. Since I am not quite finished I wont post it on the project page yet, but I have put it in my user space. There are a number of things I would like to get comments on before "finalizing" the plot of the chapter (but, as I said, it is not done yet, I have a few more things to write). First of all are the characters. These are the ones I have introduced:
- Sir GH Christopher, protagonist and retired major
- James "the Count" Winter, host and deceased
- Johanna, his daughter
- Adams, the butler
- Lord Margaret, a physician
- Lady Margaret, his wife
- Corpral Marsden, a young soldier
- Lady Chetfield, anemic aristocrat
- Roger Penfield, long time friend of the Count
- Miss Inglewood, columnist
Are these acceptable to everyone? I'm happy to change them if they arn't. If you want to introduce new characters, please do so in flashbacks or something, beecause I snowed the manor in. I'll be writing for a few more hours and see if I can get it done, but I'd love some comments if anyone has the energy to read what I wrote. Oh, and again, I apologise for the language. Gkhan 18:13, Apr 4, 2005 (UTC)
- That's cool. I'm looking forward to reading the first chapter. Don't worry I've done lots of english-enhancement on Wiki, etc, so I will proofread your work when its up. --EatMyShortz 07:54, 9 Apr 2005 (UTC)
- If this ever gets off the ground, I'll join in. The time constraints may be the main difficulty. After all, everyone here does have a real life, don't they? What if we took the info above, claimed a chapter, wrote from one of the listed characters or additional character's POV (I'll be Ethelynn, the new upstairs maid), and then put it together and edit jointly for content and flow? Each character would tell about events before, the murder, and events after from their POV, then we would have different snapshots to work from. We could then jointly write the revelation of the murderer and the conclusion. Having the first chapter to work from would be important, however. How goes it. Gkhan? WBardwin 17:56, 28 May 2005 (UTC)
Ethelynn
"Well, sir." The young woman wrapped her raw boned hands in a sacking dish cloth. "I'm new, you know....an I don't know much yet about the household an' nuthin' about the master's guests."
"Please sit down, Ethelynn." Christopher pointed to a chair. "We'll just talk about what happened that day and what you might have noticed. After all, you were about all day helping people."
"It was a busy day, sir. With the weather, an' Cook snowed out, an' all." Ethelynn sat on the edge of the red brocade seat. "But, I can't be long, sir. I just put the pies into the oven."
"I must tell you, Ethelynn, you have done a fine job with the food. Everything has been delicious."
"Thank you, sir. But, Cook, she did a job of stocking things up for the guests, and had many of the dishes already prepared. So, it has been easy to keep things going."
"Can you tell me what you remember the evening before the murder? Just what you did and what you saw?"
Ethelynn pulled the chair closer to the desk and leaned toward him. "Well, before Cook left to look after her old father, she asked me to put on a clean apron and help Mr. Adams with the guests. So I was downstairs when the Lord an' Lady Margeret arrived."
Ethelynn stood erectly against the left wall of the entry way while Adams answered the door.