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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 23:18, 10 July 2012 (UTC)
- Hi, I'll review this article! MathewTownsend (talk) 23:18, 10 July 2012 (UTC)
- review
Just a few comments:
- I made some edits that you are free to change.
- Make a slight tweak to one as Baja California is a state in MX as well as a peninsula. YE 17:29, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
- "developed from a tropical disturbance offshore the coast of Africa. After developing on August 13," - kind of repetitious
- Removed the first part as it was not true AFAIK. YE 17:29, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
- San Carlos needs disambiguation
Done. YE 17:29, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
- "making Doreen the wettest tropical cyclone for the state of Nevada." - as of that date?
- Yea, but the record has not been broken since. YE 17:29, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
- but you don't know when a view is reading this article. Perhaps they're read it a year from now, and that statement may not be true then. It's a rule somewhere in MoS not to use uncertain dates. I've changed it. MathewTownsend (talk) 17:50, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
Otherwise the article looks fine. Will put on hold. MathewTownsend (talk) 17:02, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. YE 17:29, 12 July 2012 (UTC)