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Military camouflage is currently a War and military good article nominee. Nominated by Chiswick Chap (talk) at 15:59, 7 January 2013 (UTC)

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Some comments

Some suggestions/proposals for the lead: 1. The 1st 2 sentences of the lead don't clearly define the subject - is it just visual or does it include radar, IR etc ? The lead sentence should have a link to Camouflage. Maybe something more like "Military camouflage is the use of camouflage by a military force to conceal personnel and equipment from visual observation by enemy forces..." 2. Would a lead pic with some background be better (e.g. File:Arw4.jpg) ? 3. I think the lead is still a bit too long (for the size of the article). For example the "previously known as" bit, which is specific to (British?) English probably shouldn't be in the lead (especially if it's not elsewhere in the article) - maybe a separate Etymology section. 4. "camouflage" is in italics which means I'd expect it to be linked to an article about the word camouflage (e.g. on wiktionary). 5. "military camouflage was first practised in the mid 18th century" ... "Camouflage was developed for military use ... in 1915" is contradictory. DexDor (talk) 20:21, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

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