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Steamer Maxwell is currently a Sports and recreation good article nominee. Nominated by Resolute at 03:12, 11 January 2013 (UTC)

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  • Did you know... that future Hockey Hall of Famer Steamer Maxwell's disdain for professional sport caused him to quit playing in 1915 after learning fellow players were getting paid?
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Reviewer: Disc Wheel (talk · contribs) 02:39, 28 January 2013 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
General
  • "He served two seasons as coach of the Monarchs before moving to the cross-town rival Winnipeg Falcons."
Monarchs? I'd suggest putting the whole team name here since this is a new section.
Done.
  • He played rover, and began his senior career in 1909–10 with the Winnipeg Monarchs of the Manitoba Hockey League (MHL), appearing in one game.
The Winnipeg link needs to be disambiguated. Also I just feel the sentence construction is awkward. Maybe try this: "He began his senior career in 1909-10 with the Winnipeg Monarchs of the Manitoba Hockey League (MHL), where he appeared in a single game and played the rover position."
I moved the Rover part into the preceding sentence and reversed the remainder to eliminate all the awkward pauses.
  • "By virtue of the title, the team was granted posession of the Allan Cup, emblematic of Canada's national senior-amateur championship, but initially refused to defend the trophy against a challenge by the Kenora Thistles after the Cup's trustees ruled Dick Irvin ineligible."
Sort of the same problem here, but I'd suggest making two sentences out of this and make sure the past tense is being used.
Broken up.
  • "His business interests outside of hockey prevented Maxwell from travelling to Belgium with his team, however the International Ice Hockey Federation (IIHF) lists him as the coach for the gold medal winning Canadians, who outscored their opponents 29–1 in three games played."
";" after "his team," instead of the ","
Done
  • "Remaining in the Winnipeg are for his entire career, Maxwell coached several of the city's teams."
... Not too sure what you're saying here. Try to keep with past tense since this is an encyclopedia entry.
Reworded
  • "Instead, Maxwell returned to the Winnipeg Monarchs, leading their junior team to the western Canadian championship in 1931–32."
"leading their junior team" -> ",where he led their junior team"
Done
  • "They lost to the eastern champion Sudbury Cub Wolves in the Memorial Cup final, however."
I'd rewrite this as: "In the Memorial Cup final, Maxwell's squad lost to the eastern champion Sudbury Cub Wolves."
Done
  • "The company, which focused on plywood supply, was successful, making Maxwell a millionaire."
Rewrite as: "The company, which focused on plywood supply, was successful and ultimately made Maxwell a millionaire"
Done
  • "Maxwell turned to photography and world travel following his retirement."
Start the sentence with "Following his retirement, Maxwell... travel"
Done
  • "He was known for his quick, and often barbed, wit; his friends often told a story of an Arenas baseball game where, after failing to convince the umpire that it was too dark to play, Maxwell sent his players onto the field with lighted candles."
Definitely split this sentence up, with the first dealing with how he was known for wit and the second being about the story.
The story is an example of said wit. I replaced the ; with a :. Better?
  • I'd suggest running the text through a word document with spell check to catch misspelled words.
    So I just noticed. Done.
Overall

It's well written and cited where it should be. Just some easy fixes and its GA worthy. Disc Wheel (Malk + Montributions) 02:39, 28 January 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! I have responded to your comments. Thanks, Resolute 03:00, 28 January 2013 (UTC)
Fixed everything. Looks good. GA. Keep up the good work on this site. Disc Wheel (Malk + Montributions) 03:08, 28 January 2013 (UTC)
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