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This is a very high-quality article: well written, sourced, and organized, and on a fascinatingly terrible story. I have a few clarity suggestions/questions below.
"Richard Nixon" -- I wonder if it's worth noting "future US President Richard Nixon" here, both to be clear that it's that Richard Nixon (it's an odd context to encounter him in) and to highlight the significance for non-US readers.
I wonder if it would be good to add "future" or "one day" or some other phrasing here to avoid the momentary disorientation of suggesting that Nixon was President while on the team. Not enough to hold up the GA pass for, though. Your call.
"it has since been noted as" -- it seems worth mentioning who did the noting here; also, consider rephrasing "noted" per WP:WTA
"in the game against the Bees" -- wasn't it a doubleheader rather than a single game? Perhaps "one of the games"
"The following after" -- afternoon?
"Hershberger obliged" -- perhaps "agreed"? "Hershberger obliged" implies that he actually did this, which doesn't seem to have been the case--or did he go to batting practice but then disappear before the game?
"After he missed the first game" --who were they playing? Is this another doubleheader?
*"Inside, he found Hershberger's body" -- is the "he" the employee or McKechnie? Clarified.
"McKechnie never publicly revealed what" -- how do we know of it today?
"Cohen found Hershberger's body in the bathtub with his throat slit" -- per SI, it sounds like Hershberger was outside the tub, leaning over it so he would bleed out into the tub. Is this consistent with other sources?
Thanks for the fast review! Issues all fixed. To answer the publicly revealed note, we don't know. We only know that he stated he wouldn't tell it; McKechnie took that to his grave. To my surprise, all three days against the Bees in August were doubleheaders (including a third doubleheader after these events), so the suicide came in the middle of six games in three days. One can only imagine how drained the Reds had to have been by the end of that... Wizardman02:57, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
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