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Just a note that I am reading this over, and comparing it to what is now at Fluor Corporation. I'll give more detailed feedback soon(-ish). My first quick thought is that this looks much, much better than what is live. I'm afraid I won't be much help in determining whether or not it will be good enough for GA but I can at least lend my support as an unbiased editor without a COI. -- Atama頭 22:00, 27 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for letting me know! I had just pinged user:North8000 not knowing if anyone was actively taking a look. It's a large body of work, so I figured it would take some time to give it a lookover. Most editors are just like me and never get to most things we intend to do. CorporateM (Talk) 22:31, 27 February 2014 (UTC)

Looks like a big improvement. Are you aware of anything significant that has been removed? Sincerely, North8000 (talk) 22:36, 27 February 2014 (UTC)

Below is the material that didn't make it into my draft, because it wasn't sourced well-enough. For the Notable projects section, I mostly looked for jobs included in profiles that summarize their most important jobs, with some exceptions where the item was covered in a lot of media. However it wasn't always clear which projects to include. I was really on the fence with the San Francisco-Oakland Bay Bridge project for example.

• building its first hydrocracker plant in 1968 for the American Oil Co. in Texas City (primary source)
• helped established its credentials in the oil and gas industry (editorializing)
• In 1932 it was awarded its first major refinery contract for Shell Oil at Wood River, Illinois. (primary source)
• building its first hydrocracker plant in 1968 for the American Oil Co. in Texas City (primary source)
• In 1995 Fluor acquired ADP, a design and project management business; in 1996 it acquired Marshall Contractors. (press release source)
• In 2000 it spun off its coal operations to Massey Energy Corp.. (primary source)
• The corporation was sued because of "numerous design and construction failure" on a project in north Chile in 2002. (primary source)
• In 2009, Fluor entered the solar industry when it was contracted to design a 46 MW solar thermal plant in a partnership with California firm ESolar. (Other projects were more "notable")
• Eastern span replacement of the San Francisco–Oakland Bay Bridge: completed in in 2013 (As discussed I was really on the fence, but needed to be selective about which projects are notable enough to include)
• U.S. Army's LOGCAP program & Al Zour Refinery (unsourced)
• However, in March 2009, the Kuwaiti government informed Fluor to halt construction because reduced oil prices had made the project financially unfeasible. The announcement did not come entirely as a surprise because former Kuwaiti Prime Minister Nasser Mohammed Al-Ahmed Al-Sabah had been mentioning cancellation. Some investment analysts predicted the project's cancellation as early as December 2008. Fluor announced that it would remove $2.1 billion, the remaining value of the contract, from its books. (broken link and one of those guest-post type Forbes things. There is one legitimate source in Bloomberg but again having to be selective about which projects are notable enough to include.)
• Fluor has also been ranked No. 1 in Engineering News-Record (ENR) magazine's 2012 list of Top 100 Design-Build Firms and No. 2 on its Top 400 Contractors list. Fluor was selected one of the "Global Most Admired Knowledge Enterprises (MAKE)" for the sixth consecutive year in 2011 and named one of America's Safest Companies by EHS Today magazine in 2011. (unsourced and/or promotional as we tend to avoid rankings, etc.)
• Fluor has also been named one of the World's Most Ethical Companies by Ethisphere magazine for six consecutive years, 2007-2012. (unsourced and we prefer to avoid rankings)

CorporateM (Talk) 23:10, 27 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks. I didn't mean to make you do all of that work; that's a more thorough answer than I hoped for. North8000 (talk) 23:25, 27 February 2014 (UTC)

From my edit summary at article page: "Sub in CorporateM draft as discussed at this talk page, COI noticeboard and at article draft. Please revert me if you do not agree" North8000 (talk) 19:23, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks. I just fixed the logo image, since trademarked images can't be posted in user-space. I just wanted to make sure if Atama had any feedback? I was a bit rude in pinging you not knowing that he/she was actively reviewing. CorporateM (Talk) 19:34, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

You know me....bull in a china shop, but with an invitation to revert me. It sounded like Atama was done, but if not, please revert me or mention it and I'll revert myself.

I was thinking about asking you what you would think about putting the logo back in somewhere, but you were way ahead of me. Sincerely, North8000 (talk) 19:48, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

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Reviewer: TLSuda (talk · contribs) 19:02, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

Greetings! I know you've waited a few months for a review, but I have good news! I'm stuck in a tin can for 5 hours tomorrow late night UTC, so I'm going to use that time wisely to review this article. I expect to have the review posted in the early morning hours UTC the following day. (Approximately less than 36 hours from this post.) I look forward to reading and reviewing this article. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 18:15, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

Thanks User:TLSuda! One thing I will point out about this article is that as a construction company (as oppose to tech, internet or something more modern) it is not a buzzy topic that gets as much media coverage as you would expect for a Fortune 500 company, so some of the sources are a little weak or non-traditional (for example, I found a government report that summarized their most significant government contracts). I think I have used good judgement in these cases, but I'll see what you think in 36 hours! CorporateM (Talk) 19:47, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

Hey @CorporateM: sorry about the extreme delay. Internet has been spotty where I've been staying, so I've only been posting responses as I can. Here's my review. Take your time in responding if you need it. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Initial review

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   Almost there, just a few small things to consider. See prose review below. TLSuda (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Prose review

Lead

• "global services" does not need quotes around it.

 Done It's actually the name of the division, so I put it in title-caps, etc., which should do the trick CorporateM (Talk) 15:35, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Early history

• "President" should be lowercase when referring to the position and not using it as a title. IE President Obama vs Obama is president.

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:39, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

• "Business declined rapidly during the Great Depression and picked up again during World War II" change "and" to "yet", it flows better

 Done I used "but" does that work? CorporateM (Talk) 15:39, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

• Spell out United States or write it as U.S. in the next sentence.

 Done

• I just want to verify that the president in 1952's name was Si Fluor and that it isn't typo.

 Done The source says "John Simon "Si" Fluor Jr." which is what I have now placed in the text. CorporateM (Talk) 15:43, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Diversification and restructuring

• Add a comma after "In 1972..."

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:43, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

• Same for US as above.

 Done

• "Fluor's international business rebounded." When? What business? I assume sometime after 1987, but it is unclear.

 Done Changed to "revenues" to make it more clear. CorporateM (Talk) 15:58, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Recent history

• Add a comma after "In the 1990s..."

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:47, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Organization

• Fix US

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:48, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

• Link CEO to Chief executive officer, as this isn't always the meaning of the acronym

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:49, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

• "anticorruption" should be "anti-corruption"

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:49, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Notable objects

• US again x 3

 Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:51, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

Side question

• Not relevant to the GA discussion, but: Any reason you didn't use more of the parameters of the infobox? Like founder= former_name= area_served= divisions= ? TLSuda (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

 Done Good question. CorporateM (Talk) 15:54, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

And with all of your additional work, I'm very happy to promote this article! Good work @CorporateM:! I'm glad that your work is so high quality and that your COI does not prevent you from being neutral as possible. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 23:44, 13 July 2014 (UTC)

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