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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 21:17, 3 February 2020 (UTC)
- @Krakkos: Great to see this important article in such a good shape. First comments below, more to follow in the next days.
- inhabitants of present-day Swedish island Gotland in Baltic Sea call themselve – I'm not a native speaker, but I would add "the" before both "present-day" and "Baltic Sea".
- certainly, of course – these can be removed according to Misplaced Pages:Manual of Style/Words to watch.
- Paulus Orosius wrote – Would be helpful to introduce him (e.g., "the priest Paulus Orosius") and state when he wrote this. This will help a lot; while reading I was wondering if this was a contemporary author or a modern scholar.
- and onwards was so considerable that some – the "who" maintenance tag should be resolved if needed and removed.
- began moving south-east from their ancestral lands at the mouth of River Vistula, putting pressure on the Germanic tribes from the north and east. – I can't follow: they were moving south to put pressure on the tribes in the north?
- began moving south-east from their ancestral lands at the mouth of River Vistula – Why did they move, do we know the reason?
- In the spring of 399, Tribigild, the Gothic leader in charge of troops in Nakoleia – Hi is an ostrogoth, so why is he mentioned in the visigoth section?
- He settled the Visigoths in Gaul and Honorius' sister Galla Placidia, who had been seized during Alaric's sack of Rome – what about the sister? Is something missing here?
- Why did Alaric sac Rome? Motives would be interesting and important.
- After being driven from Gaul, Athaulf retreated into Gaul in early 415 – From Gaul to Gaul??
- Under Theodoric I the Visigoths allied with the Romans in inflicting a severe defeat – The article on that battle says the battle was somewhat inconclusive … is "severe defeat" the correct wording? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:17, 3 February 2020 (UTC)