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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:24, 2 March 2011 (UTC)
- I fixed a dab link (audio mixing → Live sound mixing ) please check
- ELs are clean
- "The double-disc release features a recording of their headlining performance at the 2009 Download Festival along with a 45-minute behind the scenes documentary created by percussionist Shawn Crahan, and the four music videos from All Hope Is Gone." - comma after Festival, and link music video
- "and it included free giveaways" - not mentioned later
- If you are going to mention individual reviews in the lead I think you should cite them here.
- Why? they're not quotations, and quotes are generally the only things required to have references in the lead.
- Expand the lead to include charts
- Release date and genres are in infobox, but not in body
- I added the release date, but isn't the genre explained in American heavy metal band Slipknot? CrowzRSA 02:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- OK, leave heavy metal there, but I suggest removing nu metal, and alternative metal. And the release date still is not in the body. Adabow (talk · contribs) 03:33, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- There have been SEVERAL discussions on whether putting genres like nu metal and alternative metal and it always comes down to weather or not sources list them as that genre, and allmusic refers to most of the songs (both live and studio) to be either nu metal or alternative metal, and the whole (sic)nesses page () lists it as heavy metal.
- OK, but what about the release info? Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:27, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
- I added it to the lead; (sic)nesses is the fourth video album by American heavy metal band Slipknot, released on September 28, 2010. CrowzRSA 22:29, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
- And your source? Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:31, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
- Added source. CrowzRSA 22:44, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
- Not good to start the body with "It"
- Comma after "Shawn Crahan stated that"
- Indicate that Gray was a member of the band
- Link MSN
- "Shawn Crahan attended the New York event" - don't need his first name again
- Album title in Crahan's quote should be italicised
- "The DVD was released on September 28, 2010 sold 9,300 copies" - missing word
- Link and italicse Billboard
- I removed the sentence (see below for explanation) CrowzRSA 02:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- Why are other charts not mentioned in prose?
- I removed the sentence, as all of the chart positions can be found in the "Charts and certifications" section. CrowzRSA 02:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- I would recommend that you summarise the charts in prose. If you rally don't want to, then move Charts and certifications to a level three header under reception. Adabow (talk · contribs) 03:33, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- As is, there really isn't enough information on the entry date and entry position and stuff, so the prose would be very bland… I think in the future the sites will update it to include that stuff, but that may be way off. CrowzRSA 21:16, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
- Would the music videos not start at chapter 19?
- The DVD doesn't list them as 19-22. I figured that it was intended that they were separate track listings, and that they deserved separate number listings… CrowzRSA 02:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- How about "legal names" instead of "real names"?
- Is there a reason that the band members are in descending order? Ascending would seem more logical.
- Italicise album title whenever it occurs
- I fixed everything in the body and all, but left the reference titles alone. CrowzRSA 02:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
- The Charts and certifications table is a bit confusing, as it kinda implies that the Top Music Video Chart is responsible for the certification, when Billboard do not have anything to do with certs
On hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:24, 2 March 2011 (UTC)
- I am satisfied with improvements. Passing now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:48, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks, CrowzRSA 16:13, 6 March 2011 (UTC)